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Essay: Are success and happiness interchangeable ideas to you?, Essays (university) of Psychology of Happiness

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The following sample, which reflects an average placement into College Writing I, was written in response to this prompt: "Are
success and happiness interchangeable ideas to you? Answer this question in a brief essay with examples and illustrations to support
your position." To help you think about your own writing, we have made a few notes to explain what makes this a passing essay.
COMMENTS:
1. The writer has a
clear thesis and
explicitly takes a
position on the topic.
2. The writer uses
clear topic sentences
to explain the purpose
of each ¶.
3. The writer develops
the ¶ with a relevant,
specific example.
4. While the referent
of "it" is unclear, this
minor error (along
with a number of
others in this essay)
would not cause the
essay to fail. We
expect to see some
minor errors on the
sentence level, but a
passing essay will
always be clear and
readable. If an essay
is confusing to the
readers, it will not
pass.
5. The word "clothes"
is misspelled "cloths."
A few small errors
might not cause the
essay to fail, but an
accumulation of small
errors demonstrates a
lack of control.
6. The writer avoids
basic usage errors,
such as confusing
their, there and
they're; to and too; or
its and it's.
7. The writer does
more than just define
each term and give an
example of each. The
argument shows a bit
of development.
8. The writer shows
good unity by
concluding the
argument firmly and
reasserts the thesis.
In general, the essay
is a little repetitive,
but our readers
understand that it was
written under
pressure. While it is
not perfect, it shows
all of the things that
we listed in our letter
to you. We expect
that a student writing
at this level will be
successful in College
Writing I.
While the ideas of "happiness" and "success" seem related at first glance, I believe they are two
separate categories and represent two different ways of looking at the world.1 First of all, happiness is a
feeling, which success is not. A person doesn't need to be successful to be happy, because a wide
variety of things can make a person feel happy, and those things might not be the same from person to
person. Success isn't an emotion; it's a judgment of its own kind. To say a person is successful or
unsuccessful is a way of evaluating that person, and deciding whether they measure up to a standard.
It's important to see the difference between those two things, or you could end up missing out on
happiness.
Happiness can come from a sense of personal accomplishment or achievement, which is why
happiness and success are easily confused. It feels really good to reach a goal, especially if you've set a
goal that is meaningful to you.2 For example, in my high school, there is a history teacher that everyone
thinks is a tough grader. Mr. Anderson teaches a European history class that is not required, and usually
only the smartest students take that class because of its reputation for being difficult.3 I'm not at the very
top of my class, but I liked the other history classes that I'd taken, so I was considering signing up for it.4
I had a hard time deciding. I didn't want to get a bad grade, but a friend of mine who took that class last
year gave me good advice. She told me that I shouldn't worry about it, because the class would be good,
so I signed up for it. At the start of the year, Mr. Anderson told us how much he expected from us, and I
thought about switching to another class because it seemed impossible. I got a couple of bad quiz
grades, but I stayed for extra help and my grades started to get better. Right now, I have a B in that
class, and I'm very happy with that. This kind of happiness is based on how I feel about myself. I tried
to do something that was difficult, and even though some people might not think of a B as a success, I'm
happy with it. I know how hard I worked to get it, and that makes me feel like a success.
Success is too often confused with gratification. It's easy to see how this happens. We live in a
world that tells us that it's important to be rich and that it's important to have a lot of things that
demonstrate your wealth, like designer cloths5 or an expensive sports car. Everywhere you look, on TV,
in magazines and in newspapers, there are pictures of rich and famous people. Being rich and being
famous are goals that people set because of greed for material possessions. We all know examples of
people who "make it big" but are very unhappy. The comedian Dave Chappelle got his own TV show
and became famous and rich. Everyone considered him to be a successful person, but underneath he
was very unhappy. In fact, he was so unhappy that he had to stop making his show because he had a
nervous breakdown from the pressure of being a success. Dave Chappelle is a classic example of how
being successful is different from being happy. He had attained success by society's standards, but that
couldn't make him happy. People who think that having all of the things that you want is the same as
being happy are confused. They're6 overly interested in what other people think of them, and want to
impress everyone, but it's difficult to control other people's opinions, and so it's not a good idea to try to
base your happiness on what other people think of as success.
If society was less materialistic, we might see that there are other ways to think of success.7 If a
person was kind and gentle, we could think of that as success, but we don't. If a person went to school
or work every day and tried his best, even if his grades weren't great or he didn't make a lot of money,
we could consider that person a success, and we probably should. Maybe if we started to think of
success differently, there would be more times when success and happiness would be the same thing.
We focus too much on power and money and on having things, and I think that is keeping a lot of people
from being happy.
Once you stop to consider the difference between happiness and success, it becomes clear that
while they might sometimes happen together, those two ideas are not necessarily connected.8 You
might have a humble job that doesn't have much prestige, but you might enjoy it. Or, you might not like
your job that much, but you might have a great life at home that makes you happy. On the other hand,
you might have an impressive career that gives you a lot of money and respect, but you might hate your
work, or you might be unhappy with your life outside of work. If you look at the way things are in
society, it is obvious that happiness and success get confused all the time. Happiness is a feeling that
exists inside a person; success is too often a measurement that is based on what other people think of us.
You have to know the difference if you want to be happy, and being happy with yourself is a kind of
success that everyone should be able to experience.
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The following sample, which reflects an average placement into College Writing I, was written in response to this prompt: "Are

success and happiness interchangeable ideas to you? Answer this question in a brief essay with examples and illustrations to support

your position." To help you think about your own writing, we have made a few notes to explain what makes this a passing essay.

COMMENTS:

  1. The writer has a clear thesis and explicitly takes a position on the topic.
  2. The writer uses clear topic sentences to explain the purpose of each ¶.
  3. The writer develops the ¶ with a relevant, specific example.
  4. While the referent of "it" is unclear, this minor error (along with a number of others in this essay) would not cause the essay to fail. We expect to see some minor errors on the sentence level, but a passing essay will always be clear and readable. If an essay is confusing to the readers, it will not pass.
  5. The word "clothes" is misspelled "cloths." A few small errors might not cause the essay to fail, but an accumulation of small errors demonstrates a lack of control.
  6. The writer avoids basic usage errors, such as confusing their, there and they're; to and too; or its and it's.
  7. The writer does more than just define each term and give an example of each. The argument shows a bit of development.
  8. The writer shows good unity by concluding the argument firmly and reasserts the thesis.

In general, the essay is a little repetitive, but our readers understand that it was written under pressure. While it is not perfect, it shows all of the things that we listed in our letter to you. We expect that a student writing at this level will be successful in College Writing I.

While the ideas of "happiness" and "success" seem related at first glance, I believe they are two

separate categories and represent two different ways of looking at the world.

1

First of all, happiness is a

feeling, which success is not. A person doesn't need to be successful to be happy, because a wide

variety of things can make a person feel happy, and those things might not be the same from person to

person. Success isn't an emotion; it's a judgment of its own kind. To say a person is successful or

unsuccessful is a way of evaluating that person, and deciding whether they measure up to a standard.

It's important to see the difference between those two things, or you could end up missing out on

happiness.

Happiness can come from a sense of personal accomplishment or achievement, which is why

happiness and success are easily confused. It feels really good to reach a goal, especially if you've set a

goal that is meaningful to you.

2

For example, in my high school, there is a history teacher that everyone

thinks is a tough grader. Mr. Anderson teaches a European history class that is not required, and usually

only the smartest students take that class because of its reputation for being difficult.

3

I'm not at the very

top of my class, but I liked the other history classes that I'd taken, so I was considering signing up for it.

4

I had a hard time deciding. I didn't want to get a bad grade, but a friend of mine who took that class last

year gave me good advice. She told me that I shouldn't worry about it, because the class would be good,

so I signed up for it. At the start of the year, Mr. Anderson told us how much he expected from us, and I

thought about switching to another class because it seemed impossible. I got a couple of bad quiz

grades, but I stayed for extra help and my grades started to get better. Right now, I have a B in that

class, and I'm very happy with that. This kind of happiness is based on how I feel about myself. I tried

to do something that was difficult, and even though some people might not think of a B as a success, I'm

happy with it. I know how hard I worked to get it, and that makes me feel like a success.

Success is too often confused with gratification. It's easy to see how this happens. We live in a

world that tells us that it's important to be rich and that it's important to have a lot of things that

demonstrate your wealth, like designer cloths

5

or an expensive sports car. Everywhere you look, on TV,

in magazines and in newspapers, there are pictures of rich and famous people. Being rich and being

famous are goals that people set because of greed for material possessions. We all know examples of

people who "make it big" but are very unhappy. The comedian Dave Chappelle got his own TV show

and became famous and rich. Everyone considered him to be a successful person, but underneath he

was very unhappy. In fact, he was so unhappy that he had to stop making his show because he had a

nervous breakdown from the pressure of being a success. Dave Chappelle is a classic example of how

being successful is different from being happy. He had attained success by society's standards, but that

couldn't make him happy. People who think that having all of the things that you want is the same as

being happy are confused. They're

6

overly interested in what other people think of them, and want to

impress everyone, but it's difficult to control other people's opinions, and so it's not a good idea to try to

base your happiness on what other people think of as success.

If society was less materialistic, we might see that there are other ways to think of success.

7

If a

person was kind and gentle, we could think of that as success, but we don't. If a person went to school

or work every day and tried his best, even if his grades weren't great or he didn't make a lot of money,

we could consider that person a success, and we probably should. Maybe if we started to think of

success differently, there would be more times when success and happiness would be the same thing.

We focus too much on power and money and on having things, and I think that is keeping a lot of people

from being happy.

Once you stop to consider the difference between happiness and success, it becomes clear that

while they might sometimes happen together, those two ideas are not necessarily connected.

8

You

might have a humble job that doesn't have much prestige, but you might enjoy it. Or, you might not like

your job that much, but you might have a great life at home that makes you happy. On the other hand,

you might have an impressive career that gives you a lot of money and respect, but you might hate your

work, or you might be unhappy with your life outside of work. If you look at the way things are in

society, it is obvious that happiness and success get confused all the time. Happiness is a feeling that

exists inside a person; success is too often a measurement that is based on what other people think of us.

You have to know the difference if you want to be happy, and being happy with yourself is a kind of

success that everyone should be able to experience.

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